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"What do people say when they stare Death in the eye? To bring them back, of course. But why should I do for them, what I couldn't do for myself?"
This is the Journal of The 200th reincarnation of Death
This is the Journal of Death Himself
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Table of Entries
Poem: I Am
3. 최하늘
Poem: Does It?
Illustration: The Serpent
Illustration: Spilled Blood
4. Orion
Poem: If I Had Wings
Comments (11)
I just read ebry single one of these
And they are ABSOLUTELY MAGNIFICENT!!
I LOVE them!! I can't describe all the reasons why, because there are many, but I definitely hope you write more.
Okay first of all Ferris.. :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: :heart: :heart: :heart: :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :clap: 🏻 :dancers: ♀ :dancers: ♀ :dancers: ♀ :heart: :heart: :heart: :joy: :joy: :joy: :revolving_hearts: :revolving_hearts: :revolving_hearts: :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: :revolving_hearts: :revolving_hearts: :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: :revolving_hearts: :revolving_hearts: :joy: :joy: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:
Okay now to the critiques!
Pros: Um... amazing dialogue! Amazing description, amazing setting, amazing story as a whole!!
Cons: Only if you stop writing. :joy:
Loved this Ferris! I felt the effort and I honestly loved this!!!
Thank you :joy: :heart: honestly this is a very low effort project. I write all the entries in one sitting, so I'm glad that they're not boring :joy: :tada:
:star2: I really have no words for this :star2:
Notes;
★This is an amazing story, and even if I havent been able to read through all of the parts the first part got to me. I love the story so far, it is really amazing and it really ropes someone in.
★ Your structure is good and so is your dialogue, the only thing I would recommend is the adding more description after the dialogue.
I mean its already humorous but just for the effect :joy:
Keep writing! :star2:
#Merthurliveson ⇒ I had too
The first part was more of an opening, the rest of them are written like a journal and have very loose writing
But thank you for your words :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: #Merthur4Life
You already know what I think, Ferris.. I love this series. You are an amazing and talented writer. The concept of the story is amazing and the title fits perfectly.
You describe well and make the reader super curious with only all this summary up above.
You are able to hit me hard with your stories, and also with this one. I think it's super interesting and you are talented in keeping the interest for the reader.
Keep on the great work! I hope I can give you better critique next time!
You always give the best critiques :raised_hands: :raised_hands: :heart: :heart: :heart:
BOI THESE ARE EXTREMELY AMAZINGGGGGG.
I read all of them even though I was supposed to read like one or two. :joy:
Honestly Abigail was the best. I loved her desire and ambition to be there, not only that but the fact she was just a simple child. Her mind was not wired right and that's what I loved a lot.
Critiquing is saying what you did right and wrong, and honestly you did like imagery, and mood completely right. I'm blessed to read this.
Thank you :joy: :heart: :heart: :heart: