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It Was Never Happy [POEM]

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Kyrie 08/06/20
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Those happy endings were all lies,

just made up so little kids

could sleep at night with the fireflies.

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                     I decided to enter the contest!

                     The quote is from Section 1, with it

                     being,

                     “I'm chasing damn fairy tales.”

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╭          Bit of a Warning          ╮

Heavy Themes

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It Was Never Happy

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It Was Never Happy [POEM]-[IC]Those happy endings were all lies,
[IC]just made up so little kids
[IC]could sleep at night wit

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I'm chasing damn fairy tales

As if I haven't heard them before,

Like I couldn't tell who prevails

In fights that had ended before it began,

For like every other tale,

This one, too, is also poetic,

A tragedy that's waiting to happen

Yet ed only for its quote,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

Wherein heroes go and wreck themselves

If they fail even but one task

As insignificant as the dust beneath them,

But even the dust beneath

Once served as a vessel for a star,

Alas, even the stars await for their death,

Much like each story has their ending,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

Just to hear innocent blood cry out,

Howling against the wind and sky,

Asking why they're bloodied time and time again,

Yes, all of their cries and pleas

Is but beauty in another tone,

A symphony hidden amongst distraught,

Yet always shown in each epic hymn,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

To see the broken ones rise above,

Watch them treat scars as medallions,

Only to lose it all once they have relapsed,

But the applause grows from there,

Cheers of awe echo throughout the halls

As the denouement approaches the scene

To steal the show like it always does,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

Just to see if it is addictive,

For I do not see the appeal

Of crowning glory over a road of thorns,

Of wounds and scars all around,

Of broken minds that can't be restored,

Is ruination truly required

For stories to be called as stories?

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

To hear happily ever afters,

Then see the world rewind, repeat,

See it start again with “Once upon a time,”

How cruel, yet romantic,

For the hero to suffer again

In their never-ending quest for glory

Yet be rewarded with wounds and ghosts,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

So that I could see the puppet's act,

To see the hero dance and jive

While the world give applause at its tragedy,

I could see it in their eyes,

The wish— the want— for all things to end,

Just one push, I think, is all it will take,

A nudge, a touch, before things go mad,

I'm chasing damn fairy tales

As if I haven't heard them before,

Still, I give standing ovations

To broken heroes who wished they never were,

I could see it in their eyes,

Telling me it was never happy,

Yet I will keep chasing down fairy tales

For I never get to live in one.

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Hello dear writer. I'm honored that you considered me worth summoning to this godly piece of writing. Let's get to this hoping I can do you justice.

Positive Comments

Man. What. This whole poem has so many quotable lines that i lost count midway through. Kyrie, you've always been very punchline heavy, but even by your standards, this is absolutely exceptional. The second stanza set a mood so hard that I forgot that I'm not the poet. I got lost between the lines and didn't even want to find a way out.

Here's a little analysis about your writing style. You have (usually) one of the most simplistic writing styles in the community, but that's exactly why your punchlines hit to damn heavy. And this piece was an epitome of an example for the same.

This poem, from what I could read, covered how happy endings aren't a thing and sorrow and pain is all that waits for us in the end. Although the said notion is heavily written about, what set yours apart was the amazing delivery.

Each stanza felt like it had a raising tone of voice for the first half of the poem but then..the tone mellowed out and in such a smooth and beautiful way. I know that you used a quote as a prompt for this poem, but very honestly. This poem has so many quotes in it that people may write a poem off of every stanza that was added.

The little details like "of" and "of" made it even better and fun to read through. The questioning tone added a feel of conversation and I'm a sucker for those. All in all. Well done.

negative comments

I feel like you barely edit your poems or put minimum effort into it. Although you're really good with punchlines and this poem is damn near perfect, a few things could be worded better, with a little bit more imagery.

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5/5

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2 Reply 08/15/20

Thank you so much for your input!!

Anyway... um, well, I try not to edit my poems that much. Unless I am forced to or see that it's a mess, I barely touch it after writing it. A few changes here and there, sure, but I keep it to a minimum... something about delivery and all that.

As for the wordings... eh, I have a hard time looking for better words. I think you've noticed it by now but I have a set rhythm in every poem I write... and it becomes a challenge to find words that fits :joy_cat:

And oh mai gawd... 5/5 rating..? Truth be told, the highest I was expecting was... maybe around 4 or 4.5!!

:smile_cat:

Anyway, thank you very much again for your !!

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1 Reply 08/15/20

Reply to: Kyrie

The two things you mentioned are absolutely alright. You could continue to write the way you do and still blow us away. I myself barely ever edit poems. They're mostly first drafts. What I mentioned just from an "objective" standpoint as that's my job :joy:

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