Just an extremely extremely simple poem that I wrote in 5 minutes as I decide I wanna write before I sleep today. Goodnight amino. I hope you're doing okay. I hope you get better. I hope you find happiness. I hope you enjoy this poem.
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Warning : hints to intimacy
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In a parallel world, you and i
will be laying on the rooftop,
i'll look away for catching a shooting star,
you'll take a bite of the moon,
and put it back in the sky;
which is to say the moonlight
will flow through your veins and your eyes,
they'll shine and look into mine.
in a parallel world, you and i
will hold each other's bodies close,
and there will be celebrations
inside of me, ferris wheels sparkling
with fireflies glowing through
my transparent skin,
for you to see anything and everything,
that you do to me;
for you to make my skin a farmland
of all the damaged things, which are
never not beautiful.
in a parallel world, you and i
will make love inside wooden cottages
creaking with the sound of my moan
that begins with your name,
and ends with the sheets inside my fists;
everything in between is like
gogh's strokes on the canvas,
one by one, giving a new meaning
to the night sky -
stroke by stroke, demanding a trail of jitters
on the length of my skin;
and i'm telling you, my love,
the roof would break open,
for the sky to watch.
in a parallel world, you and i
will be jigsaw pieces of two
different sets of puzzles,
and still find each other and fit
better than where we had belonged
all our lives.
the gaps between my fingers
would be like a stencil for yours
to find a home in,
the place between my collarbones
would be your place of solitude;
i'll sing you lullabies, just, please
fall asleep with me.
in a parallel world, you and i,
will be us,
instead of you / and / i
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Comments (23)
I'm so unwellllllll but thank you for existing and blessing my eyes with this godliness
5 minutes!!!???? "in a parallel world, you and i will be jigsaw pieces of two
different sets of puzzles, and still find each other and fit better than where we had belonged all our lives." :heart_eyes: :heart_eyes: just beautiful and sensual I :clap: :raised_hands: :clap: :raised_hands:
thank you! :sob: :sob: :two_hearts: :two_hearts: :two_hearts:
bruh
Bruh
Who r u freaking kidding?!
My poor excuse for a brain can't process the fact that u wrote this masterpiece in 5 mins....just...oh right,ofc u r beyond my comprehension anyways...just what--
And this poem just makes my heart a mush...like oml :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts:
Thank you :sob: :sob: :sob: :sob: :blue_heart: :blue_heart: :blue_heart: :blue_heart:
Reply to: Para Phrased
Hmph...ik what I said.
So yep... :joy:
This poem genuinely made me flush pink a good bit. And gosh, only 5 mins? Honestly, it takes me like 30mins-1hr to write something that’s at least decent.
‘i'll look away for catching a shooting star, you'll take a bite of the moon, and put it back in the sky; which is to say the moonlight/ will flow through your veins and your eyes, they'll shine and look into mine.’ These lines from the first stanza genuinely pulled me in and grabbed my full attention. Gosh, these lines are so simplistic and yet they continue some absolutely gorgeous imagery. We all know you have a way with words but holy moly baby. This is only the first stanza and I’m already floored.
‘or you to make my skin a farmland/ of all the damaged things, which are/ never not beautiful’ These are some of my most favourite lines in the whole entire poem. Oh gosh. I feel like the speaker is giving the reader insight into who they are; someone who’s unfortunately ‘damaged’ from traumatic experiences. But they acknowledge that all the trauma their skin and story shows is still utterly beautiful. Because they are ‘farmland’, aren’t they? And despite how poor the soil can be, after a period of healing, new things will soon begin to grow. A yield of love will be harvested :’)
That third stanza is probably, and I say this with zero embarrassment, my favourite stanza. Possibly the most beautifully crafted images in the whole entire piece. ‘everything in between is like/ gogh's strokes on the canvas, one by one, giving a new meaning/ to the night sky -’ Oh gosh I ADORE these lines, seriously. I don’t know, to me these lines depict the lover’s actions as works of art. The gentle or rough brush strokes filling the canvas with a fiery ion and explosions of colour. Also, correct me if I’m wrong but I think there’s a double entendre in this line ‘stroke by stroke, demanding a trail of jitters’ and it has me dead. I- I’m so done with you.
‘the gaps between my fingers/ would be like a stencil for yours/ to find a home in, the place between my collarbones/ would be your place of solitude; i'll sing you lullabies, just, please/ fall asleep with me’ Oh god these lines are making my ears turn pink and gosh i feel so wARM. Everything about this just screams ‘you’re my home, please stay with me’ and god. I’m slightly tearing up. I hate how we’re so far away from each other. But seriously, I’m telling you; you can sing me to sleep anyday :’) I’ll hold you the whole time.
‘instead of you / and / i’ what a finish honestly. I love how you use the slashes, they almost look like they’re making a statement. They’re separating the ‘you’ away from the ‘i’, preventing them from becoming one. Becoming...us. I’ll say this to you a thousand times over but oh my god- I love you :heartpulse: :heartpulse: :heartpulse:
(also baby, in the first line of the last stanza you wrote ‘would’ instead of ‘world’. Just thought i’d let you know. Mwuah :3 )
Third stanza huh :eyes:
You basically caught everything once again. Your comment made my morning baby. Thank you so much :heart: :heart: