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[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2Fadc959302ff84ba4ce80b1c5845455eba424a845r1-500-333v2_hq.jpg)
RED - Blood Princess
The Princess in red
Would become a bride tonight
In her blood tainted dress.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2F6939646d00d320e80afd1a0e4e56fbca4bb50010r1-332-443v2_hq.jpg)
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ORANGE - Dancing Flames
The orange flames danced
Engulfing my little surprise
Now it has turned black.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2Fd690d41fe7c5ca870b5f49744ff94061a1deb628r1-349-421v2_hq.jpg)
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YELLOW - Commoner's Tragedy
A banana peel
She placed her careless foot on
Tumbling down the stairs.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2F26d52353db2a1c463f04b064a0e2bc0d044109e4r1-543-271v2_hq.jpg)
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GREEN - Abandoned Waves
A stagnant ocean
Covered in abandoned slime.
No sailors in sight.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2F85e2b3211a4a28d8d1ca81dcd3d3e340ff9c1f79r1-484-304v2_hq.jpg)
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BLUE - Splash of Paint
Uninspired canvas
Dried brush, abandoned idea.
Soaked in blue paint.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2F4712fc21167001533c468b6b17b7e12bd8638ef3r1-397-371v2_hq.jpg)
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INDIGO - One's Blood, Another's Pleasure
Farmer's bitter sweat
Plantations under the sun
A beautiful dye.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2F6fa56f4b600439900335fb51d326e4263db7e82cr1-350-266v2_hq.jpg)
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VIOLET - Flora Kingdom
In the poppyland
Violets are spread everywhere
Very intoxicating.
![Rainbow Haiku-[IMG=YGX]
[CB]RED - Blood Princess
[IC]The Princess in red
[IC]Would become a bride tonight
[IC]In her blood t](https://image.staticox.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Fpm1.aminoapps.vertvonline.info%2F7024%2Ff40c823be9a1e6fdc56b57747838537f5761c5e3r1-469-314v2_hq.jpg)
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Comments (5)
Hey Hey!
I'm Con, and thanks for partaking in Critique Day! Add #CDJan for more posts of yours to be critiqued! Now, let's get on with it! :revolving_hearts:
I really liked the Haiku! I tend to not make them but I understand the concept! The pictured in between each one representing the color also makes it better!
I really like the one with a chicken in it!
No errors, which is great! Keep it up and continue writing!
Hello there!
And thank you for participating in Critique Day.
Your haikus are all really cute and I found the rainbow pictures intervening between them to be a very aesthetically pleasing concept.
I absolutely loved the green one by the way. Such vivid imagery in only a few words and the perfect image to go along with it!
I have two questions however:
1. Couldn't splash of Paint be about any colour?
To be honest I found it a bit off. A very generic poem compared to the rest.
2. What's the connection between poppyland and violets?
While the poem was really pretty, it really did strike me as bizarre that these two flowers would be related in any way.
Again, thank you for taking part and keep up the good work!
Hi there!
Thank you for participating in Critique Day! Here is some of my :
- I like how there’s some kind of humour in your poetry, this makes it easy and fun to read!
- I also like how you added the pictures for each colour cause this really brightens up the post XD
- I couldn’t find any errors, so well done!
So not a lot of criticism, just a lot of praise! Well done and enjoy Critique Day!
Hello! Thank you for participating in Critique Day!
> These are short but cute and they each tell their own story. I enjoyed reading them!
> The one I got confused on was the poem for the color yellow:
"A banana peel
She placed her careless foot on
Tumbling down the stairs."
- the order seems kind of off and the smooth rhythm that the rest had on the tongue quickly tumbled. I would simply suggest to change the order to:
"She placed her careless foot on
A banana peel
Tumbling down the stairs."
>Other than that, these were creative! Can't wait for more.