TIDE :wavy_dash: Part 2 :wavy_dash:

ocean 11/12/17

"What's the matter?" Brackenspots asked. Thrushtalon still was red in his face.

"N-nothing!" He stuttered. " Aw,lighten up! You're fine!"Brackenspots chirped.

With an embarrassed sigh,he let the blsuhing ware off."That's better." The

spotted she cat mewed. Thrushtalon padded beside her as she began to pad

into the ferns,her light brown fur camuflaged against the sticks and brambles.

Brackenspots stopped. She closed her eyes...what was she doing?" You o--"

Thrushtalon cut off as Brackenspots bounded into the forest.She stopped

again at a big dead log. Thrushtalon raced after her."Why did you run off?Wait..

Mouse?" Thrushtalon meowed, panting."Yep." With a swift flick of her tail,

Brackenspots pounced onto the mouse killing it with a neck bite."Nice Catch!"

Thrushtalon purred.

" Aw, it's nothing." Brackenspots replied.

Thrushtalon tilted his head."Are you kidding? That's the best catch I've seen in

moons!"His gaze filled with happiness,akin to hers.

She didn't reply,but she quickly skidded up a tree bough to get a bird.But it flew

away before she could claw at it.

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TIDE :wavy_dash: Part 2 :wavy_dash: -[C]

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LittleKitty

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Hello there! I have noticed you have used #GCR to see if your post has grammar mistakes.

P1, L3: Before you said "aw, lighten up!" There is a space between aw and the quotation mark which isn't necessary. Also, you need a space before the comma.

P1, L4: After the quotation mark, you'll need a space.

P1, L5: you need a space between the comma and he. Also, there is a typo with blushing!

P1, L6: you need a space between the first period, and the question mark.

P1, L9: there should be a comma between the first comma and her. Camouflage should be spelled like that, not how you had it.

P1, L14: There should be a space between the first period and she.

P1, L16: There should be a space between the first period and the first quotation mark.

P2, L1: There should be no space between the quotation mark and aw.

P2, L6: You shouldn't start a sentence with but.

Reminders:

You need to put spaces after your commas! There also needs to spaces after periods and the ending quotation mark. Other than that I see no other mistakes.

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LittleKitty, apprentice

1 Reply 12/02/17

LittleKitty

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Hello friend! I have noticed you have requested for your post to be reviewed by a member of CCGD. I will start proofreading your post now!

Please that sometimes CCGD Warriors make mistakes too, and if you don't agree with some things that I say, that's okay!

1 Reply 12/01/17