Setbacks on my part. (TWH ~ Ch.5 Progress Report)

I've been slacking off to edit more on the next chapter for The War Hero by GameTester. He has said things on Twitter and (probably) on here telling the local fans that the next chapter WILL be released this month and hopefully before the holidays however, I'm not certain this will remain true. I know how worried he can be when it gets to a point like this where a chapter hasn't been released in a while and that the hype might go drastically down (like having your freshly dropped Titan destroyed by an enemy Titan who fell 2 seconds after you called in your mech).

So uh, SORRY!

In a way to keep the hype up, lemme show you my current progress in editing so far, I probably don't have the authority to do this and will probably get slapped in the face afterwards. Just so the chump doesn't go complete hog wild on my parade, here's the excerpt from the beginning of the chapter that Wit teased in his Apology Post back in November (I think?) compared to my edits. Stay posted.

A Witness' version (BEFORE):

<Anyways, things haven’t been going well for us. Ever since we went deeper into this sector of the Frontier, we’ve lost more pilots to the IMC’s more resilient defenses. As far as I know, Ashley and around seven more pilots were the only ones alive on the Redeye alone. Because of this, grunts like me have been going on mandatory stealth raid operations (which in my opinion are boring and slow). Even then, we were losing more than what we are gaining.>

<Eventually, General Anderson finally got his head out of his own arse and decided to fix things. I was just blowing off some steam in the gym area when the old man gave the announcement through the PA system.>

Gen. Anderson: [PA] Attention crew and engers of the Redeye, this is General Anderson. As you may have noticed, I have hired mercenary pilots to fight with us to help with our waning pilot count. But that isn’t the only thing I’m doing; from now until the end of the year, anyone who thinks they can fight in the big leagues may enlist for pilot training regardless of rank. Many of you may not make it through the course entirely, or even have your applications accepted, but I’m confident that some of you will complete training and the ranks of the Militia’s best. You may ask a commanding pilot for more details. Anderson out.

And my version (AFTER):

<Anyways, things haven’t been going well for us. Ever since we went deeper into this sector of the Frontier, we’ve lost a lot of Pilots to the IMC’s more resilient defenses. As far as I know, Ashley and around seven more Pilots are the only ones left alive on the Redeye along with other ships in the fleet having similar numbers too. Because of this, Grunts like me have been going on mandatory stealth raid operations (which in my opinion are boring and slow). Even then, we were losing more than what we are gaining.>

<Eventually, General Anderson finally got his head out of his arse after being shoved so far up in there and decided to fix things, about time! I was just blowing off some steam in the gym area, lifting weights and all that, when the old man gave the announcement through the PA system.>

Gen. Anderson: [PA] Attention crew and engers of the Redeye, this is General Anderson. As you may have noticed, I have hired Mercenary Pilots to fight with us to help with our waning Pilot count. But that isn’t the only thing I’m doing; from now until the end of the year, anyone who thinks they can fight in the big leagues may enlist for Pilot training regardless of rank. Many of you may not make it through the course entirely, or even have your applications accepted, but I’m confident that some of you will complete training and the ranks of the Militia’s best. You may ask a commanding Pilot for more details. Anderson out.

If anyone can tell, I've given the character in the spotlight lots of expression. Even to the point where things will seem...different...later on once the chapter is done and released. :wink: (I've taken to my own creative liberty to bring you a story that is more than just a simple Log Entry.)

Plus, I ran out of ideas for how I was going to differentiate my commentary compared to the story excerpts. Sorry for bending and/or breaking any rules that I might've tampered with in this post. I just NEEDED to get this out so my paranoi--I mean "very worried" friend doesn't seem like a liar if expectations aren't met.

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<It's motivational, alright? Don't judge me.> ~Viv