An Announcement to all who have read my novel.

I’ve come to make an announcement, to anyone who has been reading my novel (Sonic and the First Great Adventure) so far.

I am officially going to thoroughly Rewrite many parts of my Novel.

For a long while, though I fealt that my Novel had many flaws, I still tried to continue writing onwards despite the many problems, but now I feel like the Issues are a bit too distracting to just ignore, and so I am going to rewrite the Novel to fix some of these problems.

Why did I decide to announce it all like this? Well, the reason why is that some of the

changes that will made to this book will be so big, that readers of my novel may be a bit confused over why some things are suddenly different, and instead of having to read the whole novel again, you Can just read this list of changes that I’ve made. (, I’ve yet to add in some of these changes, so you’ll have to wait a while.)

One of the biggest changes, will actually be with the Main Title. See… one thing I noticed is that the Title (“Sonic and The First Great Adventure”) is a Rather Lousy one. It doesn’t have a great ring to it, it sounds Overly Confident, (as if it knows that there will be sequels) it basically says that the South Island Incident was the “FIRST Great Adventure” which is questionable and it kinda kills the tension a bit when you know that this is merely the First Adventure, which means that Sonic will make it out in the end.

And so, for a different title, I’m gonna go a bit simple and just call it “Sonic The Hedgehog”

I could possibly add something like “And The South Island Incident.” But I don’t know.

Another really big change is that Chapter 1 and Chapter 2 are going to be combined into one whole chapter.

Both chapters are rather short (Compared to the other ones) and with the many changes I plan on making, it would feel out of place having the first two chapters be so short and then having the rest of the chapters be so long, so I decided to just smush them together into one. You might ask “But then what about the other chapters? What about Chapter 5?” Well I’ll reveal my plans later down the list so don’t worry.

Now…

Here is a list of some of the Changes that will be made to each Chapter

(Keep in mind that this is not all of the changes, just some of the most important ones.)

Chapter 1 The Introduction

<When I wrote this Chapter, it was written in the Present tense (as in “There’s a Planet called Mobius.”) However I’ve decided to rewrite it in Past tense (as in “There Was a Planet called Mobius.”) The reasons for doing this is so that the introduction ends up sounding less like a physics class at school and more like a story of a grand and mystical wizard.

<There’s going to be a lot less Lore reveal in this Chapter, so the whole part about the wars between Humans and Mobians will be cut. The reason for doing this is because I want this novel to be kind of innocent (In a deceptive way) as in, though there are a few dark aspects and moments, most of this Novel is just going to be a fun and exciting story from the eyes of a child who loves adventure.

<The narrator is going to Act a little less like a character, so the story Can seem more intriguing.

<One thing that I’m gonna try to do is make most of this novel be written more simplistically. I want this novel to feel more imaginative, fantastical and fairytale like while also having a relative edge. Less Tolkien and more Miyazaki.

Chapter 2/1 One Faithful Morning

<Not that many huge changes are going to be made, though Christmas Island is going to be rewritten as a really small island.

<The tree branch which Sonic is located on as a baby, will be located over a river.

<Sonic is now legally allowed to cry (Atleast while he’s a baby.)

< :heart: :heart: /BabyRattle.

<One issue with the novel is that everytime there’s a piece of worldbuilding, it kind of stops the story in it’s Tracks. To fix this, I am going to do the same thing that Richard Adams did in his novel Watership Down, where whenever there’s a piece of worldbuilding, it’s written at the bottom of the page in parenthesis and an asterix. Of course that only works with books, so I am gonna have there be a parenthesised explanation at the end of a scene.

Chapter 3/2 The Days Of Purity

There will be many changes made to this Chapter, some more important than others. Some of the most important (I feel) will be…

<Instead of Wach chasing after a robber in car, he just chases them on Foot.

<The whole scene where Sonic, Marda and Wach talk about Wach’s police job, will be rewritten to be about Sonic looking at the other islands in the distance.

<There is that whole sequence where Sonic starts school and then suddenly gets tired of his life on Christmas Island. That sequence is going to be played more seriously (Almost), as in it seriously effects Sonic in a way, which gives him the need to get outta there and go adventuring.

<The age in which Sonic leaves Christmas Island may be changed from 6 to 7.

<The final scene of Marda and Wach after Sonic leaves is going to get cut. The Chapter is just going to end with Sonic jumping off the plane and diving down to South Island, leaving the Chapter at an exciting cliffhanger, and somewhat leaving Marda and Wach in the past.

Chapter 4/3 Sonics Freedom/Sonic The Hedgehog

<Chapter 3 is going to start off where Chapter 2 leaves off, but now from the Semi-perspective of a Random fisherman who meets Sonic, before shifting to Sonic as he Begins his new life in absolute freedom.

<After the first half where we’ll see Sonic get used to his new environment, The Chapter is going to do a jump cut to One Year later when Sonic is 8 and a full-blown adventurer, going around and doing whatever he wants. In a way, this jump cut will kind of be like the moment where the story truly begins.

<A lot of this Chapter is somewhat going to be shown from different Characters perspectives and different encounters with Sonic, showing off Sonics character without giving too much of his character away. We’re still gonna get explanations on how Sonic lives, but it will be described in a very mysterious way.

<The “Kompadium” will be changed to “The Com Islands”.

Chapter 5/4 The Doctor

<Now We get the introduction to Dr. Robotnik, and one really big change that you’re gonna have to get used to, is that his name isn’t gonna be referred to as Dr. Robotnik anymore.

He is now called Dr. Eggman.

He does call himself Dr. Robotnik and prefers that title, but his full name is Ivo Eggmund Robotnik and because someone called him Dr. Eggmund in front of Sonic who misheard it as Dr. Eggman, Sonic (And by extent the Narrator) is just going to call him Dr. Eggman, much to Ex Robotniks dismay.

<All of the islands that Sonic goes to are going to be either unnamed or unexplained.

<That whole dialogue sequence between Sonic and Eggman, during the Peachway Forest Segment is going to be cut (Or atleast moved to a later scene.) Instead, Sonic sees the Badniks tearing down the Forest hurting the Forest Animals, goes over there and beats the shit out of them without any talk.

There will likely be many more changes made, since I do feel like this chapter has some other major problems.

Chapter 5 :sparkles: South Island :sparkles:

With Chapters 1 and 2 being stitched together, what about Chapter 5? Well, in the place of Chapter 5 there is going to be a whole new Chapter titled “South Island” in which We get a more thorough introduction to South Island.

See, one major problem that I feel with the “Adventure half” of the story is that there is little build-up to it, and so this Chapter could serve as a great beginning to the Adventure.

Things this Chapter is going to include are…

<A small introduction to South Island, some of it’s legends and it’s Zones, without giving too much away.

<A segment where We get to see what the Island looked like before Dr. Eggman came in and created Scrap Brain.

<A whole new scene where We see him build Scrap Brain. Sonic tries to stop him, Maybe they have the whole argument that would have happened earlier in Chapter 4 (Kinda) and Eggman reveals his Evil plan to take over the world, before his Badniks hilariously run out of energy, giving Sonic a jump start. Sonic is defeated however and vows to make Dr. Eggmans life as Miserable as possible.

<Afterwards the Chapter will become similar to the final half of the original Chapter 5 where We hear about how Sonic and Eggman would become great enemies and would fight routinely, and then the scene where We see Eggman think about his Evil plan to take over the world which will become the events of the main Adventure.

<In another perspective shift, the “Evil plan scene” will be played from the perspective of a little squirrel who gets captured and later Robotisized, in a way making you feel for the animals and thus raising the stakes.

One universal thing for this whole novel, is that I have to get the character Right. The way it’s written right now, Sonic is written very inconsistently and Dr. Robotnik is Maybe a bit too boring. With the Gameplay removed, the Story and Characters have to take the center stage, and therefore the characters have to be understood. What all of this means is that I’m probably gonna have to watch a lot of character Analysis videos on Youtube, and write a lot of character wikis.

Chapter 6 How the Adventure Began

Now We get to the main adventure of the Novel, and… I won’t deny that it’s been kinda lacking. Now, though I’m a very paranoid person, I don’t want to presume that everyone has this exact feeling about my writing, however I do kind of understand why the chapters of my Novel stopped being featured when I started the main adventure. The Chapters are Overly long and are mostly filled with pointless action which you’d have to read through a Max Speed to get any juice out of, It’s hard to get invested with the Characters and story because there’s little to no build up, and it sounds at some points like a static retelling of someones playthrough of the game . (If anyone doesn’t feel this about my writing, or if there’s another reason why my Novel stopped being featured, do let me know.) Either way, I am gonna try my best to correct those mistakes and make the South Island Incident feel as exciting and Well put together as possible.

Here’s the major changes

<Sonic won’t start the Adventure on South Island but comes to the island Upon hearing a newsboy shout the news that the Badniks have gone berserk, and thinking the Eggman is up to his old tricks, he scoots over.

<Instead of having the whole thing about reading the animals body language, Sonic can just understand animals now, meaning the animals Can talk. That should probably give the theorists something to Chew on.

<There will be many Lines taken from the Japanese game manual for Sonic 1.

<One thing that goes for all of these “Level Sequences” is that I’m gonna have to cut a lot of the Fat. A lot of the action feels a bit pointless and doesn’t do a lot and is also over explained, and so I’m gonna have to either cut or shorten some of the more pointless bits, and make the action more quick.

Chapter 7 Green Hill

<One problem I have is that I kind of started off a bit too big. A thing about Sonic 1 is that as the game progresses, the levels get harder, however some of the actions that I’ve had Sonic performing on Green Hill seem a bit too hardcore for the first level (For example jumping over platforms while being fired at) So I’m gonna have to cut some of that and tone some of the action down. Of course, this will probably Depend on how I’ll write the later chapters, where things actually have to be hardcore.

<I may add a few small story elements in the midst of all the action.

<The world of Mobius as a bit too realistic. I want to change some of the descriptions to seem a bit more similar to the original game, while still keeping it believable, meaning Striped Grass and Checkered Dirt for all.

<In the Egg-Wrecker scene, instead of leaving Eggmans alibi vague, he clearly States that he’s going to take over South Island and the world, which with the introduction of the new Chapter 5 is less of a surprise.

<I am considering having the Badniks each have a Corresponding animal inside them, (like Buzz Bomber=Flicky, Moto-Bug=Rabbit) But Idunno.

<The Chaos Emeralds are going to be referred to as Emeralds from the very beginning, Maybe.

Chapter 8 Marble Hill

“Oh, Marble Zone, what am I gonna do with you?”

<The whole description of the old ruined temples is going to be moved to before the Marmorisa Segment.

<The townsfolk of Marmorisa should Act a bit more like they’re kind of on Sonics side (With the exception of Hermiz, of course.)

<Many of the changes made to the Last chapters are going to made with this one too, as Well as all the others. A lot less Fat and a lot more Fun.

<I need to stop repeating myself so much.

Chapter 9 Through The Flames

<I don’t know what to do about Scarclaw. He’s one of the animals who gets the most characterisation, and yet that whole part about him wanting to help Sonic, but being refused and then doing so anyways, only to get captured, kind of gives the wrong lesson. I made the scene to introduce that the Badniks have nets now, but I should move that one to earlier. As for Scarclaw, I Dunno.

<Now We get to one of my toughest decisions. If you have read the entirety of Chapter 9 to the end, you’ll know that at the end of the Chapter, I had Ray The Flying Squirrel introduced to the story. The Plan was that he would have revealed Eggmans plot to steal the Chaos Emeralds, as well as talking about the legends of the Chaos Emeralds. He would have served as a kind of guide to Sonic on his quest, while also serving as someone who Sonic could bounce with, which could show Sonics ability to effect the world around him. My reason for having that character be Ray was because I fealt that Ray should have had a Solo story, away from Mighty, as Mighty gets his Solo story in Knuckles Chaotix, so why not Ray. My plan for Rays character progression throughout the (Possible) Series, was that he would have started off as a lonely yet optimistic kid, who never knew Mighty, but through his experience with Sonic, he would learn never to give up hope and keep on fighting, then later on in the Series, where Mighty would quit the Chaotix to go do things by himself, the SegaSonic story would happen, where Ray and Mighty would meet for the first time and would become like brothers (Yeah, in this Universe, I had planned for The SegaSonic Arcade story to have happened after Knuckles Chaotix, as well as during Tails SkyPatrol (Which, Yes, Is canon.)) Now that idea seemed great when I first thought of it, but the problem is that it also sounds a bit too similar to Sonic and Tails, where they suddenly meet a few books into the series and become great friends/brothers. I already realized that Ray is very similar to Tails, and so having both of them have the almost same character progression would make it even worse. Having Ray and Mighty knowing eachother since the beginning makes it more different and interesting, and gives Ray more of a chance to stand out, but then if they always hang out with eachother, then why would Ray chill out on South Island all alone, and if I added Mighty into the story then he would be too distracting since I want this story to be mostly about Sonic. Sonic is the one who does all the adventuring, mostly by himself, meanwhile this other character stands in the sideline and serves as a small guide, something which is hard to imagine both Mighty and Ray doing at the same time. Plus, I don’t think this role really fits Ray. Ray is a very cheerful and optimistic character (A Ray of Sunshine if you will) and the Character I want for this story is someone who is cheerful, but with a serious tendency to break down and loose hope when situations seem hopeless, and who also has knowledge on the Chaos Emeralds.

With all of these Issues combined, (Though it seriously pains me to say this) I think that I should replace Ray with another more fitting character.

Maybe Ray could be in the Mighty scene from earlier, or I could include Ray in my (Possible) Retelling of Knuckles Chaotix. As for who is going to replace him, I’m trying to get the Feels for who that character should be. It’s a hard decision because this character has to be someone who Can easily be placed in the role of a friend rather than a Sidekick.

With some of these changes, I will sadly have to replace or even remove some of the illustrations to fit more.

Either ways, that was some of the changes that I am going to make with my Novel.

Keep in mind that some of these changes may be changed, especially when I finish with the Story as a whole. There are those moments where I first need to see what works of course. The prologue half will probably need some sparkling up so that it Can fit with the latter Half of the story (Honestly, sometimes I wish I hadn’t started the story with a whole Sonic Backstory.)

So if you’ll wonder why I won’t be posting that many new chapters of my novel for a while, this is why.

Thanks for Reading, Have a Nice day.