Zephyros — My OC

Arhe 04/21/18

So Zephyros uses they/they pronouns because I wanted to be much more inclusive in my art and in the community.

Name: Zephyros Sæma Marie

Ethnicity: They were born and raised in Senegal (West Africa) until they were 17 when they moved to Arcata, California.

Biology: There, they got a high school education when they found the astrobleme of the Ivaldi. The Ivaldi was a failed attempt at a regulatory vessel in 1969. The vessel was supposed to be orbiting the moon when Apollo 11 finally touched down. Only, the Ivaldi went past the moon and landed in Mars’ orbit. It was then pinball bumped back towards the Earth and brought into its atmosphere where it crashed down. Luckily, the scientists who launched it didn’t put people in it.

Now, the year is 2018 and Zephyros had found a long abandoned vessel that was 2 fields behind their house. What could go wrong?

Birthdate: 6/14/2001.

I’m still developing their story and I will start posting it somewhere like AO3. ~~~~

This is my first digital free hand drawing. I usually like using bases because it’s easier and I don’t have to use my imagination as much.

Zephyros — My OC-So Zephyros uses they/they pronouns because I wanted to be much more inclusive in my art and in the communit

#critiquemyoc

#requestplease

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Yanny

The squad has noticed your call~

Hello there, I'm Yan from OC's CoffeeHouse here to critique your oc

As for now, I'd rate your character 7/10, mainly because it's missing their personality.

The design is really well done. The colors you used go together nicely, it's pleasing to the eye~ I love their hairstyle, it's really unique. I also like the clothing, it's simple yet the gemstone on shirt makes them stand out.

You did not include personality so I can't critique it. Shame, because it's really important part of creating oc. Add some good and bad traits, their likes/dislikes, maybe a hobby?

The backstory is really interesting, but doesn't say much about the character. It's more focused on event happening in the world around them. Try and write something about Zephyros' past, what was their childhood like, what are their relations with family, do they have any friends, why did they move to America?

Thank you for using our hashtag, I hope it helped~

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